Looking for Discworld/White Collar help

Hiya folks I wrote (some time ago, as usual) another installment in Discoworld/White Collar crossover where Neal is friends with Death (from Discworld) of course. Now I have two versions of the same fic one ca. 4K the other ca 1K. And of course I can't decide which one I prefer. So I'm looking for someone that would be willing to take a look on both, help me decide which one to use and which one delete, and help with some beta stuff - grammar especially - my Achilles heel...

Anyone??